Wow Diljot! What I really loved about your writing is all the precise verbs you used, such as defeating, wrapped, smashing, trapped. All of these verbs paint an action-filled story. I can also see lots of similes such as 'jumping like a bunny', 'smashing like a gorilla'. Ka pai!
I would like to find out a bit more about hero, your character. Who is this hero? What are his superpowers? Why was he sick of following the rules?
Hi Diljot, You put so much effort into this writing. I thought it was great how the Marvel superheroes wanted to help the hero who went bad. They could have just killed him or got rid of him somehow. But it seems like they were using their powers to help him become good again.
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Wow Diljot! What I really loved about your writing is all the precise verbs you used, such as defeating, wrapped, smashing, trapped. All of these verbs paint an action-filled story. I can also see lots of similes such as 'jumping like a bunny', 'smashing like a gorilla'. Ka pai!
ReplyDeleteI would like to find out a bit more about hero, your character. Who is this hero? What are his superpowers? Why was he sick of following the rules?
Hi Diljot,
ReplyDeleteYou put so much effort into this writing. I thought it was great how the Marvel superheroes wanted to help the hero who went bad. They could have just killed him or got rid of him somehow. But it seems like they were using their powers to help him become good again.
like Ms Kwok, I also enjoyed all the action.