Hi Diljot, lots of positives in this piece of writing, well done: - You are beginning to explain and add details to your ideas - You are using full stops to separate ideas - Different sentence starters are used to add interest
You have mentioned three different ideas here: 1) That there will be more Covid cases in NZ 2) Delta can spread to other countries 3) More people can possibly pass away from Covid
See if you can split these ideas into different paragraphs. Remember to use capital letters after full stops.
Thanks for sharing your writing, Diljot. You have put a lot of effort into recording your ideas. The borders opening is a really big issues that our leaders are having to think carefully about. Its good that most people who get Delta will live, but you're right that some do die which is really sad. Keep up the good work.
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Hi Diljot, lots of positives in this piece of writing, well done:
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- You are using full stops to separate ideas
- Different sentence starters are used to add interest
You have mentioned three different ideas here:
1) That there will be more Covid cases in NZ
2) Delta can spread to other countries
3) More people can possibly pass away from Covid
See if you can split these ideas into different paragraphs. Remember to use capital letters after full stops.
Thanks for sharing your writing, Diljot. You have put a lot of effort into recording your ideas. The borders opening is a really big issues that our leaders are having to think carefully about. Its good that most people who get Delta will live, but you're right that some do die which is really sad. Keep up the good work.
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